Setting
The story took place in Johannesburg at Oriental plaza's shopping centre. It took place at the passing of the apartheid era time.
Plot
Mrs. Nebo arrived at the Oriental Plaza in a Mercedes Benz and two escorts where in a Mercedes Benz that followed the one where she was. She was with her friend Margaret. They were on a shopping expedition and entered the portals of the Plaza. They bought some shoes, then some jewellery, then swimming costumes. Mrs. Nebo then saw a lovely Indian dress on a dummy in a shop window and she bought it but there was no scarf that matched the dress. She then went from shop to shop until she came to “Moghal Boutique” and she was shown a silk scarf by Mr. Sakur. She decided to buy it but was fifteen rand short in cash. She then wanted to pay by cheque but Mr. Sakur does not accept cheques’ from customers. Mrs. Nebo felt humiliated by the shopkeepers’ action. Several shopkeepers opposite “Moghal Boutique” heard the dispute and entered to see what was happening. Mr. Sader (one of the shopkeeper) tried to convince Mr. Sakur to accept the cheque but he remained firm. The other shopkeepers then assembled money and bought the Silk scarf and gave it to Mrs. Nebo as a present to prevent risks of their houses from being bulldozed down as it happened in Pageview.
Main character
Mrs. Nebo
She is the wife of an important official of the African Front. She has a medium height. She has a smooth skin. She is rich. She like to wear clothes with colours blended harmoniously.
Mr. Sakur
He is a shopkeeper. He is short. He is a gaunt looking man. He is committed to his shop rules. He does not easily change his point.
Wednesday, 5 October 2011
Marks for Trough the tunnel
Hn7= 8/10 You started your 9th and last sentences with a small letter in your plot and also spelled the word realised wrong in your 8th sentence. You spelled finally wrong.
Saara= 5/10
You have many spelling mistakes and three grammar mistakes. Jerry's mother is not the main character. The last sentence in your plot has two spelling mistakes
Nomatter-Simon=4/10
Spelling mistakes (fist, swarm, swimm, overswarm). This is spoken language (althou, thou). Where did you read this (And when he bleed he dig a hole for the blood and pretent like he was not bleeding.). A sentence does not start with the word AND.
Saara= 5/10
You have many spelling mistakes and three grammar mistakes. Jerry's mother is not the main character. The last sentence in your plot has two spelling mistakes
Nomatter-Simon=4/10
Spelling mistakes (fist, swarm, swimm, overswarm). This is spoken language (althou, thou). Where did you read this (And when he bleed he dig a hole for the blood and pretent like he was not bleeding.). A sentence does not start with the word AND.
Sunday, 25 September 2011
Through the Tunnel
The story took place in summer at the beach.
The plot
Jerry and his mother where on a holiday at the beach. One morning his mom asked him if he was tired of the usual beach and if he would like to go somewhere else, he said no but he suggested to go and have a look at the rocks that where in a distance. When he went there he saw that it was a scoop of moving bluish green fringed with white and he then ran straight into the water and began to swim in the bay. Jerry saw some native boys on a loose scatter of rocks and he swam towards them. The native boys smiled and waved at him. The native boys started to jump into the water from the rocks which he also did. Then one native boy dived in the water and came out after a long time and then the rest followed. Jerry counted to see how long the boys will stay under water. Jerry realised that there must be a hole or a tunnel under but he could not see under because it was dark and when he goes under the water, salt water was painful in his eyes. When he went back to the villa he told his mother that he want swimming goggles and she bought them. He went back to the bay and swam and saw the tunnel and how things looked under. He then practiced to hold his breath which gave him a bleeding nose. He studied the entrance of the tunnel. Two days before they were to leave he practiced to hold his breath an was bleeding badly and was afraid of going through the tunnel but he later did even though he struggled to go through it.
The main character is a young boy called Jerry. He is an English boy. He was eleven years old. He was a good swimmer. He could hold his breath without strain for two minutes.
The plot
Jerry and his mother where on a holiday at the beach. One morning his mom asked him if he was tired of the usual beach and if he would like to go somewhere else, he said no but he suggested to go and have a look at the rocks that where in a distance. When he went there he saw that it was a scoop of moving bluish green fringed with white and he then ran straight into the water and began to swim in the bay. Jerry saw some native boys on a loose scatter of rocks and he swam towards them. The native boys smiled and waved at him. The native boys started to jump into the water from the rocks which he also did. Then one native boy dived in the water and came out after a long time and then the rest followed. Jerry counted to see how long the boys will stay under water. Jerry realised that there must be a hole or a tunnel under but he could not see under because it was dark and when he goes under the water, salt water was painful in his eyes. When he went back to the villa he told his mother that he want swimming goggles and she bought them. He went back to the bay and swam and saw the tunnel and how things looked under. He then practiced to hold his breath which gave him a bleeding nose. He studied the entrance of the tunnel. Two days before they were to leave he practiced to hold his breath an was bleeding badly and was afraid of going through the tunnel but he later did even though he struggled to go through it.
The main character is a young boy called Jerry. He is an English boy. He was eleven years old. He was a good swimmer. He could hold his breath without strain for two minutes.
Thursday, 8 September 2011
First experience with blogger
I expected blogger to have a video calling option to a friend. I expected it to process slow like other communicating applications. I expected to add music to my account. I expected to add or upload short videos to my account. I expected to search for people that are currently online. I then designed my blog. The processor was good. After designing my blog I started with my first posting. I had a problem with the password they gave me for verification of my account, the password was not accepted. I experienced errors when I had to continue to the next step.
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