The silk scarf

Setting
The story took place in Johannesburg at Oriental plaza's shopping centre. It took place at the passing of the  apartheid era time.

Plot
Mrs. Nebo arrived at the Oriental Plaza in a Mercedes Benz and two escorts where in a Mercedes Benz that followed the one where she was. She was with her friend Margaret. They were on a shopping expedition and entered the portals of the Plaza. They bought some shoes, then some jewellery, then swimming costumes. Mrs. Nebo then saw a lovely Indian dress on a dummy in a shop window and she bought it but there was no scarf that matched the dress. She then went from shop to shop until she came to “Moghal Boutique” and she was shown a silk scarf by Mr. Sakur. She decided to buy it but was fifteen rand short in cash. She then wanted to pay by cheque but Mr. Sakur does not accept cheques’ from customers. Mrs. Nebo felt humiliated by the shopkeepers’ action. Several shopkeepers opposite “Moghal Boutique” heard the dispute and entered to see what was happening. Mr. Sader (one of the shopkeeper) tried to convince Mr. Sakur to accept the cheque but he remained firm. The other shopkeepers then assembled money and bought the Silk scarf and gave it to Mrs. Nebo as a present to prevent risks of their houses from being bulldozed down as it happened in Pageview.

Main character
Mrs. Nebo
She is the wife of an important official of the African Front. She has a medium height. She has a smooth skin. She is rich. She like to wear clothes with colours blended harmoniously.

Mr. Sakur
He is a shopkeeper. He is short. He is a gaunt looking man. He is committed to his shop rules. He does not easily change his point.

Marks for Trough the tunnel

Hn7= 8/10 You started your 9th and last sentences with a small letter in your plot and also spelled the word realised wrong in your 8th sentence. You spelled finally wrong.

Saara= 5/10
You have many spelling mistakes and three grammar mistakes. Jerry's mother is not the main character. The last sentence in your plot has two spelling mistakes

Nomatter-Simon=4/10
Spelling mistakes (fist, swarm, swimm, overswarm). This is spoken language (althou, thou). Where did you read this (And when he bleed he dig a hole for the blood and pretent like he was not bleeding.). A sentence does not start with the word AND.